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The Red Mist (working title) - Part One
INT: NIGHTTIME - BATHROOM
Fade from credits to a bathroom and a close up of a man
Leaning on a sink looking in the mirror (The man’s name
is Jack he's about 43 years old), he has a crazy look
in his eyes. His white T-shirt is stained with blood.
SFX: A muffled female voice is heard.
You think you could just get rid
of me like that?...I knew what
you were up to
The camera follows Jack as he bends down and speaks to
the woman sitting on the floor beneath the sink, gagged
with a bathrobe belt.
... You’re a...
screams in her face)
He grabs her face with his bloody hand and pushes her,
the woman falls to her side on the floor. The camera
pans back and reveals a body of a young male about 20,
his body lay in a pool of blood. Jack leaves the
bathroom for a moment, the camera stays on the woman
(Her name is Heather she is about 39 years old) staring
at the body of the man. Quick glimpses of the bodies'
Jack comes back into the bathroom with a gun in his
hand and puts it on the sink, he pauses for a second
turns around looks at the young male on the floor and
runs to the toilet to throw up.
Jack crawls on his hands and knees toward Chris lying
on the floor in a pool of blood. Jack sits on the floor
...Are you happy now?
Fade to black. END SCENE.
EXT: DAY TIME- LAKE
Fade from black. One day before first scene. Opening
shot of a lake, then cut to Heather sitting on a bench.
Heather is wearing a long black coat with a matching
black head warmer, in her hand she's holding a small
brown envelope. In the distance walking down the path
which surrounds the lake, we see Chris walking toward
Heather. Heather sees Chris and stands up to greet him.
From a car parked nearby Jack is watching them, he sees
Chris hold Heather in his arms, Jack looks away with a
face of sadness resting his head on the steering wheel.
Cut back to the bench where we see Heather cuddling
Chris on the bench.
Did you tell him? (Smiling)
No...I got this feeling he
does...and I'm not sure but I
think he's seeing someone too
Why?... What makes you think
I heard him on the phone
telling someone he
She looks up at Chris. Chris looks at her and asks
Are you jealous Heather?...I
mean I understand if you are...
you've been together for a while
She smiles at Chris and then kisses him on the lips.
If I were that bothered then I
wouldn't have brought this
Heather puts the brown envelope in Chris's hand. Cut
back to Jack in the car still looking, he then drives
off. Cut back to the bench. Chris open's the envelope.
Heather watches him open it with a slight smirk. He
finds money and a slip of paper. He reads the paper.
Is this the address ? (Sounds
uncertain of whatever they have
We don't have to do this if you
don't want to?...but think of
the money...we can start a
fresh, with a family of our own
Chris stands and walks toward the lake, he stares at
the sun reflecting off the water.
A family, of course
Our own family...together... I
care about you Chris....
She gets up and walks toward Chris and hold's his hand.
(CONT'D).....that's why I
wouldn't force you into this
I know...what about after it's
I'll take care of it, trust me
Close up of Chris's eyes then fade to black. END SCENE
INT: DAYTIME - HEATHER AND JACK'S HOME
We fade from black to a low angle shot at the end of a
corridor in a modern home. We can hear a male's voice,
unclear of what is being said yet. The camera moves
slowly forward until we stop outside the door of a
bedroom, the door is open slightly. We can see Jack
sitting at the edge of his bed on the phone talking.
....I saw her at the
lake...yeah, she will...I
know...I'm not gonna let
her get away with it
SFX: Front door open and shut.
...I gotta go she's home....OK
I will see you later....bye
Heather is in the kitchen unpacking some shopping. Jack
enters the kitchen and stands behind Heather leaning on
the door frame.
Did you buy enough?
Heather stops putting the shopping away and turns
Hi...I thought you weren't
Turns back around and continues unpacking.
I brought you those frozen
meal's you like, so
you can make yourself one later
when I'm out....
Jack nod's a yes.
...How was work today?
It was ok...Randall still can be
a pain in the ass
I thought you and Mr. Randall
were good friends
Are you joking? I hate
pretending to be best bud's with
a guy a can barely stand
I always thought he was
That guys an evil nasty piece of
work...trust me I've seen his
Jack looks at Heather; Heather looks away at her watch.
Time to get ready?...I'll
Heather walk's out of the Kitchen and upstairs leaving
Jack to unpack. END SCENE.
EXT: LATE EVENING - CHRIS'S CAR
A shot of an empty driver’s seat. Then
Chris enters the car carrying in his hand a small
wooden box. He places the box on the passenger's seat
he then picks up his mobile phone and dials a number.
It's done...it went OK but I
didn't have all the money, he
insisted it was more....no no
too?...how long for?...OK
OK give me ten minutes...bye
EXT: NIGHTTIME - STYLISH MODERN PUB
Heather and Jane are sitting at a table drinking and
God I wish I was 21 again...no
responsibilities, no moaning
husband, no nagging
A pause of silence, Heather look's uncomfortable for a
brief moment and then Jane bursts out laughing.
...I'm sorry I'm just joking
it's not that bad.
Well...no one has the perfect
life, do they?
That's true...I'm gonna get
another drink do you want one?
Get me a whiskey, it's been a
Heather's get's up and walk's to the bar. Heather takes
her mobile and checks for a text but none has been
received, she then looks at her watch. Heather turns
too the bar, a barman comes to serve Heather.
A Whiskey and vodka coke...
Heather wait's at the bar. She looks around the bar,
whilst doing so she tap's her hand on the bar looking
frustrated an inpatient.
Fuck how long does it take to
pour a drink?
The barman look's over, Heather collects herself with a
Heather is back at the table with Jane, she places the
drinks down and sit's they both take big sip's of there
I needed that
Yeah me too
Heather is looking a little uncomfortable again, Jane
Nothing wrong, just thinking
...Do you think I'm too old to
start a family?
Nothing Heather...I just had a
feeling it was playing on your
mind that's all, and no I don't
think your too old....I'm Sure
you and Jack will one day
Heather smiles and take's a sip of her drink.
INT: NIGHTTIME - JACK'S HOME - LIVING ROOM
Jack is at home sitting on his settee watching
television, A bottle of whiskey is on the coffee table
in front of him and a full glass in his hand, he is
drinking whilst watching television. A shot of the
kitchen and we see someone at the back door the door
opens its Chris. He walks to the kitchen table and
puts down the wooden box, he opens it inside it's a 9mm
Chris picks up the gun and looks at it and then looks
toward Jack. He picks up the box in his other hand. A
shot of Jack watching television we can see Chris
approaching from behind carrying the gun and box. Chris
points the gun at Jack then throws the box at the floor
beside Jack making a loud bang. Jack leaps up from the
settee and turns around to see Chris standing there
with a gun.
There's a brief silence and Jack looks at the gun.
Chris looks at Jack and smiles slightly.
Sorry...I came the back way
like you said
Yeah of course...are you OK?
Yeah...she's gonna be a while
Chris walks over to Jack; Jack takes the gun off Chris
throws them on the settee, He looks at Chris and
smiles, Chris smiles back.
Jack and Chris then kiss. END SCENE.
EXT/INT: NIGHTTIME - FRONT OF HOUSE
A shot of the front of the house, Heather's pull's into
the drive. She enters the house cautiously listening,
she quietly closes the door and then takes her shoes
off, she then walks to the living room, there's a dent
in the settee.
Honey? (A small grin).....
She can see clothes on the floor and settee and
recognizes them, they're Chris's clothes. Her face
turns to a face of confusion and concern.
...what the hell?
She silently makes her way to the bottom of the stairs
but she can't hear anything so she slowly walks up the
stairs. She reaches the top and she can hear them in
her room. She creeps quietly to her bedroom door, the
door is slightly open and she can see Jack and Chris
having sex which sickens and shocks Heather, she turns
away in horror leans against the wall with her hand
over her mouth, complete devastation on her face. END
INT: NIGHTTIME - KITCHEN
Heather is in the kitchen again she looks a mess her
eyes filled with tears causing her make up to run.
Heather pours the tap's and washes her tears and make
up off. She then makes her way to the living room and
sits on the settee weeping we cut back and forth
between shots of Heather weeping downstairs and Jack
and Chris upstairs, each shot of Heather in emotional
distress and Jack and Chris having sex are getting more
furious each time we cut back to them. Heather raises
her head and she sees the bottle.
Heather stands and takes a large gulp of the whiskey
and then marches toward the phone and rips the wire out
of the wall. Heather walks back to the settee once more
and then sits up taking another big swig of whiskey.
She looks to her side and on the settee she sees a pair
of Chris's jeans in a fit of rage she throws the jeans
off the settee to the other side of the room, she looks
to her side again and there is the gun, Heather picks
the gun up and wipes the tears from her eyes, she's
stands to her feet and checks the gun to see if its
empty. The gun is loaded. Heather then marches to the
front door and lock's it. Heather cock's the gun
INT: NIGHTTIME - BEDROOM
Jack and Chris lay in the bed holding each other.
She'll be home soon...are you
ready to confront her?
Yeah...she's not going to take
this well Jack....what if she
decides to have us both killed?
She was gonna let you kill me
and take the blame, and then
enjoy spending my life insurance
money...she needs to be stopped
I am...now let’s get dressed
Meanwhile Heather is making her way up the stairs
treading carefully and her eyes fixated on her bedroom
door. A close up of the gun in her hand, her finger is
on the trigger. Back in the bedroom Chris is looking
under the bed.
What you looking for?
There downstairs in the living
Oh yeah...I need the bathroom
Go a head...but hurry up, she
won’t be long
Chris leaves the room and walks to the bathroom he
doesn't see Heather crouching down on the stair case.
Chris is in the bathroom having a pee, Heather sees him
and walks up behind him pointing the gun.
Chris looks around in horror.
God Heather please no!
(Shouts in panic)
She fires a shot and shoots Chris in the stomach. Chris
falls back and collapses by the bath tub exactly where
we see him in the first scene. Jack has obviously heard
the shot and races to the bathroom to find Heather
Heather turn's around as Jack charges toward her, Jack
then knocks her to the floor and the gun goes flying,
Heather scrambles for the gun whilst on the floor and
so does Jack. They both reach for the gun Heather grabs
it and Jack hold's her hands and they both wrestle for
Jack punches Heather out cold, a little out of breathe
he then rolls toward Chris.
Heather slowly regains consciousness as Jack tends to
Chris. Jack holds Chris weeping, behind him we can
Heather reaching for a weighing scale on the floor.
Heather picks it up she turns around and smacks Jack in
the back, he falls to the side yelping in pain.
Heather on her knees moves toward Jack and swings again
but Jack grabs her and they struggle once more on the
floor. We fade to black and we can hear them still
fighting. END SCENE.
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